And now I suppose you think I owe you proper feedback or something, yes? Pfft. ;)
First off, it's Lotrips, it's you writing it, and it's got Harry, Karl, Orlando, and Sean in it, so you already know I'm predisposed to like it.
However.
I loved it. Really, honestly loved it. It's a simple, light-hearted read (even when they're all freaking out of stupid things) and it doesn't feel like 68K words. Which is saying something.
The characterizations are brilliant and fresh, and I love how you managed to keep them consistent all the way through. Sean manages to stay smokingly hot and a little clueless, Viggo is just as batshit at the end as he is at the beginning, Harry is wise AND clueless (which just might be dangerous), Karl is scheming in a good natured "I want everyone I love to be happy" way, and Orlando, well, he's Orlando. *g* Seriously, though, I love how real this Orlando feels, from beginning to end, and how everything is a natural progression for him.
The subplots twisting through the whole story work and add to the main arc without feeling unnecessary or abrupt. Every time Lawrence shows up, I can't help grinning. Same with Dom & Billy, and Elijah's clueless Americanness just makes me laugh. They're boys becoming men and men acting like boys because they're thousands of miles away from home, playing dress up, and damn it, they can get away with it.
This whole story was fun, baby, and I'm glad you finally wrote it. :)
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First off, it's Lotrips, it's you writing it, and it's got Harry, Karl, Orlando, and Sean in it, so you already know I'm predisposed to like it.
However.
I loved it. Really, honestly loved it. It's a simple, light-hearted read (even when they're all freaking out of stupid things) and it doesn't feel like 68K words. Which is saying something.
The characterizations are brilliant and fresh, and I love how you managed to keep them consistent all the way through. Sean manages to stay smokingly hot and a little clueless, Viggo is just as batshit at the end as he is at the beginning, Harry is wise AND clueless (which just might be dangerous), Karl is scheming in a good natured "I want everyone I love to be happy" way, and Orlando, well, he's Orlando. *g* Seriously, though, I love how real this Orlando feels, from beginning to end, and how everything is a natural progression for him.
The subplots twisting through the whole story work and add to the main arc without feeling unnecessary or abrupt. Every time Lawrence shows up, I can't help grinning. Same with Dom & Billy, and Elijah's clueless Americanness just makes me laugh. They're boys becoming men and men acting like boys because they're thousands of miles away from home, playing dress up, and damn it, they can get away with it.
This whole story was fun, baby, and I'm glad you finally wrote it. :)